Monday, February 12, 2018

Lost Stories: Andrea Carter and Trouble at the Lineshack 6

Go HERE to begin this Lost Story.

This "lost scene" is not as lost as some of the others. You will recognize it as a scene from Trouble with Treasure, but with some obvious omissions. This story (I might as well tell you) was originally intended to be a Mitch and Andi story. They are not headed to a lumber camp, but Mitch lets Andi tag along with him for two weeks, while he makes his way up to the high country to resupply the lineshacks. (A lineshack being a small cabin far away from the "home" ranch for use in case a cowhand needs to seek shelter.) It's a yearly task for the Carters. What's missing are the extra characters of Cory and Jenny. Trivia fact: I added the young characters so Andi would have somebody to interact with, etc., and to add more dimensions to the story. But originally, Mitch and Andi were the only players for most of the story.


ANDREA CARTER AND TROUBLE AT THE LINESHACK

Lost Scene #6



“Are you sure you’re ready for this?” Chad leaned over the corral fence and watched his brother tie up the rest of the supplies on the backs of two heavily laden pack horses.
“Ready as I’ll ever be,” Mitch answered good-naturedly. “Listen here. I’d much rather be on a two-week trip re-suppling a string of line shacks than at Russ’s beck-and-call if he gets it into his head to put together another posse to go after the Dylans again.” He shook his head. “You should have volunteered for this job. Too bad for you.”
“Checking up on a bunch of isolated line shacks in the middle of nowhere isn’t my idea of a vacation. Half of them have probably been vandalized. Or worse, a bunch of squatters have taken them over.” Chad scratched at his chin. “Though I reckon it does beat chasing down outlaws.”
“Don’t worry about me, big brother.” Mitch jerked his thumb in the direction of the pack-horse. “I’ve got my fishing pole. There are some mighty nice lakes up around there.” He rolled his eyes skyward. “I just have to find a shack in good time, check the supplies, then spend the rest of the day leisurely fishing in the cool breeze of the hills. Fresh fish every night. What could be better?”
“Well, little brother, you do make it sound mighty tempting.” Chad pushed back his hat and regarded his brother thoughtfully. Then he shook his head. “I can see you’re ready for the trip, but my real question was are you ready for the company you’ll be keeping for two weeks—day in and day out?” Chad cocked his head in the direction of the barn as a small figure emerged, leading a golden palomino horse.
“Ah, Chad.” Mitch waved it off. “Andi and I’ll have a great time. She’ll be company. It’s the truth you can’t spare any of the men right now. She’s so excited to be allowed to go. Don’t give her a hard time.”
“Better you than me,” Chad said.
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Andi was beside herself with joy at the prospect of going off on an adventure into the hills with Mitch. The ranch continued to swelter in the heat wave, and she was bored and restless. Her escapade in town earlier that week had put a damper on any further exploits. She hadn’t been allowed back into Fresno since.
Not that she cared about going to town, but it was too hot to do anything on the ranch either. Her favorite creek had dried to a muddy trickle.
But up in the high country? The thought of riding Taffy all day in the cool shade of the pine trees, fishing in a cold mountain lake, and eating fresh fish made Andi’s mouth water. She was confident that wherever Mitch rode, she could ride too.
Andi was surprised when her mother consented to let her go off into the wilderness for two weeks, especially since she’d had to listen to no less than three conversations on the subject of “growing up” during the past week—two from her mother and one from Justin. She was so confused! Did it meant that it was okay for young ladies to go on two-week wilderness adventures, but they couldn’t have a water fight in town?
Andi shook her head as she and Taffy joined the rest of her family near the corral. She was grateful to Mitch for inviting her along, and she wasn’t about to ask her mother why it was okay to go, but not do other unladylike things.
This whole growing up idea was way more complicated than Andi ever imagined. Why can’t I be ten years old again?   
“I hope you know what you’re doing, Mother,” Chad teased. “Letting Andi out of your sight for more than a day could prove to be a disaster. Who knows what predicament she’ll find herself in.”
“Chad!”
“Mitch will watch out for her,” Justin said. “Won’t you?”
“On my life,” Mitch assured them. “And I’ll bring her back in plenty of time for her birthday.”
Mother nodded. “Ten days? Two weeks at the most.” She took one final look at her daughter perched happily on the back of her mare. The overalls, plaid shirt, and two dark braids made Andi look very young. “Have a good time, Andrea. I’m going to miss you.”
“Mother, I’m only going into the hills. It’s not like I’m going to Europe or anything, like Melinda wants to do this fall.”
“I know.” Mother smiled. “Forgive me. Just go on, you two.”
“Don’t worry, Family.” Mitch swung up onto his horse, Chase’s, back. “I’ll keep Andi out of trouble.” He winked at her. “You ready?”
“You bet!” Andi dug her heels into Taffy’s flank and took off toward the east, yelling her good-byes. Mitch accepted the tether for Charley, the lead pack horse, and waved good-bye.

****

The weather was perfect, sunny during the day, but not too hot up in the foothills, cool at night. The sky was so clear that Andi and Mitch sometimes stayed up way into the night, watching for shooting stars.
“There!” Andi announced the second night as the campfire died down and the meteors began an hourly display, “I saw the first one!”
“So, what’s your wish?” Mitch asked, taking another sip of coffee as he leaned against a log.

“I . . . wish I didn’t have to grow up,” she whispered softly. She allowed herself a heartfelt sigh and lowered her head to stare into the embers.
Mitch scratched the back of his head, then took another sip of coffee. “I see. Hmm, what brought this on?”
Andi rolled her eyes. “Let’s see. Sid telling me I need to be a young lady like his daughter and start looking for a beau; Melinda giving me a hard time about ruining my new summer dress; Mother saying I need to steer clear of the ranch hands and not get in their way. And to top it off, Justin just acting frustrated all the time.” She sighed.
“Oh.”
“Growing up might not be so bad for you. But it’s different for me.” Andi picked up a small branch and tossed it into the fire. Sparks rose up into the night, and she watched them fly away on a breeze. “I don’t want to do boring things like Melinda. Sewing circles and Ladies’ Aid, or projects that keep her cooped up inside all day.”
“Maybe she likes to do those things.”
Andi snorted. “Yeah, but she can’t expect me to like them just because I’m a girl. I want to be outdoors, doing things with the horses and cattle. But girls can’t be cowboys. I know it. You know it. And mostly . . . Mother knows it.”
“Well, I’ve heard tell of a gal . . . what’s her name? Annie Oakley? She does something no one ever thought a girl should do. She shoots. She travels all over the country doing trick shooting.” He shook his head. “I reckon lots of folks told her she couldn’t do it, either. But look at her.”
“Really?”
“Sure enough.” He stood up. “I don’t know if Mother or Justin has mentioned this to you, Sis, but growing up has more to do with putting aside childish behavior and facing new and more difficult responsibilities rather than turning into some kind of proper lady with fine airs.”
“I suppose she’s mentioned it once or twice.”  
“Well, I’d rather have a sensible young woman around, one who can think clearly and do what’s got to be done, than an addle-headed lady who knows nothing except how to put on a formal tea and dance the latest dances from the east.”
He reached for Andi’s hand. “If you concentrate on being the first, you’ll find out that growing up isn’t so bad, after all. Come on, now. It’s time to turn in. Big day tomorrow.” 
 
 

27 comments:

  1. I love it! This talk is much like the one in TWT, but I like the changes you added in the actual published edition. I'm guessing the Dylan Gang is camped out in the line shack and shoot Mitch...I can't wait to see how Andi copes with whatever's going to happen without the help of Jenny and Cory! Thanks, Mrs. Marlow!

    ~Ellen

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  2. Oh my goodness! This is so much like Trouble With Treasure. I love this scene. The brother-sister relationship is super sweet! Reminds me of me with my brother!

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    1. You and me both, Abbi! This scene, as Marissa said, has always been a favorite for me. I love reading scenes with Andi and one (or more) of her brothers. That is why TWT and DD are two favorite CCAs for me. What about you? Also, how many siblings do you have? I have 7 and am actually holding the youngest, a five-week-old, as I write this.

      ~Ellen

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    2. Aww! That’s so sweet! Well I only have 2. I am the youngest and I have an older Brother and an even older sister. I have to agree TWT and DD I NEVER get tired of reading. My FAVORITE of the CCA!! It would be fun to get a time to chat sometime, Ellen! You seem like an amazing person!! So are you closer to your brothers or sisters? My brother and I are super close, my sister and I are too, but not quite as much. He’s super protective and always is willing to talk!

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    3. Hmm...I do not know. I only have one older sibling--a brother--and we're really close. We bike together and talk a lot. The rest of my siblings are younger. My sister loves to play "paper dolls" (colored coloring sheets that we weave stories for, hence making them "come alive") with me and I have another brother that is so likable and easygoing--like Mitch ;-)--and then for the rest of the youngsters...well, we're just one big, happy family, and I would not give even one sibling up for anything!
      I would love to talk with you, but we'll have to do it through the comment form, as we're doing now, for I do not use the chat box. Would that be all right with you?
      I'm so glad you like DD, too!!! I absolutely LOVE that book! My most favorite fiction book that was ever written! Do you have a favorite scene in that book? I love the scene where the posse finds Andi after she's been kidnapped...I've even memorized it.
      So glad to correspond with you! God bless you!

      ~Ellen

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    4. That’s totally fine, Ellen! I would love to “talk” any way possible! I understand how you feel about your siblings. I feel the exact same way!!! I would have to say my brother is most like Mitch. Hmmm...my favorite scene in DD...that’s super hard. I would say it’s tied between where Andi offers herself instead of Virginia, and when Andi is found at the end. I love how you said you’d memorized it cause I do as well!!! My sister teases me because every little thing has me quoting Andi books! Lol! So what is your favorite scene from the milestones? I would have to say one of my favorites is Riley rescueing Andi in The nick of time in CL! However, I also love TAT!
      Have a wonderfully blessed day!
      ~Abbi

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    5. That is a very difficult question, Abbi! I love ALL the Milestones books, not to mention every single scene. I love the TAT sibling scenes--especially when Mitch saves Andi when Taffy runs away, Chad hugs Andi after telling her Shasta and Sunny are gone, and when Andi is saved after being kidnapped by Macy's brothers. In Heartbreak Trail it's the scenes with Andi and Mitch's conversations. In CL, I love when Riley appears at camp and then everything that happens after that (so I guess we have that in common *smile*). In The Last Ride, I also enjoy when Andi finally forgives everyone. Okay...I think that covers everything ;-).
      Have you read the Stepping Stones books? Those are so well packed with sibling moments, and my favorite book of those is "Andi to the Rescue," though "Andi Under the Big Top" is really sweet.
      Did you enter the CCA story-writing contest, Abbi? If so, what story did you enter?
      Thanks so much for agreeing to talk with me! You're such a blessing! Oh, BTW, when is your birthday?

      ~Ellen

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    6. Aww! You’re so sweet, Ellen! Unfortunately I haven’t been able to read the stepping stones. *sad face* I’m really hoping to get them soon! You’ve made me even more interested!! Lol. To answer your question...yes, I did enter. My story is called, “He Never Turns A Deaf Ear.” I guess a short summary would be: Andi is confident that she can handle the ranch when Riley announces Justin needs his help in San Francisco. However, when Andi uncovers a plot that could turn tragic for her Riley, she must decide whether or not trust the God that has never failed her for Riley and her safety. Kidnapping, hold-ups and much more prove to be a true test of a new marriage, and old faith. Through a surprising twist, an old friend comes on the scene, and, through Andi’s testimony, faces a life-changing decision... that’s all I can come up with. A little lame. Lol! Did you enter? If so what is your story? My B-day is November 12! What about you?
      It’s a blast talking with you!! Thanks!!

      ~Abbi

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    7. Oh, my!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! (uncountable exclamation marks) Your story sounds sooooooooooooooooooooooooo cool!!!!! Great job, and I don't think that summary is lame at all!!
      Mine is a "A Blessing from Tragedy" and I'm in the 10-13 category. Here's my summary: "In the year 1906, Andi and Riley Prescott venture to San Francisco, where a shocking tragedy awaits, followed by an unexpected blessing." I know...it's not as enticing as yours, but I hope it'll do ;-).
      Hey, I got permission to correspond with you through e-mail, if you would like to do that, and if Mrs. Marlow is okay with it. We each send her our e-mail addresses and she exchanges them. Would that be all right, Mrs. Marlow, and are you interested, Abbi? (Maybe we can even swap contest stories!)

      ~Ellen

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    8. Sorry it took so long. I'm in ND, and is it ever cold! One degree and falling (by now). It's convention time!

      anyway, sure. If you each send me your emails, I'll connect you gals. You can contact me through the sidebar unless you already know by email. I think you both do. :-)

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    9. That sounds amazing, Ellen! As does your story! Lol. I will send my email right away! Thanks for your compliments on my summary...and your is every bit and more as good as mine! Lol! Can’t wait to email!

      ~Abbi

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    10. Great, Abbi! I'm sending mine now!!!!! Can't wait!

      ~Ellen

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  3. This scene is so much like TWT. That scene always been my favorite in that book. I kinda like this one even more.

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  4. Well, I had to get the published TWT from somewhere, LOL. And like I have said before, this version (very old, from years ago when I was just writing for "fun,") is the original story. So many snippets will sound just like TWT, with enough variety to hopefully make it fun to read, anyway. :-)

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  5. that was a lot like in Trouble with Treasure! and I really shouldn't be picky, I just thought it was kinda funny that at the end you put a dollar sign instead of a hashtag before the seven. that is totally something I would do, Mrs.M!:D

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    1. You have the makings of a great proofreader someday, Lexah.
      We're off to ND tomorrow. Sure wish we were seeing you!

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    2. Aww thanks! Yeah, that's too bad. But hey! You never know, maybe dad will decide to go to a car auction or somethin in that same town! Haha....... Most likely :( not.

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  6. It's so much like TWT!

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  7. Aw, super sweet. I love when Andi has one-on-one chats with her brothers(especially Mitch). That's partly why Trouble With Treasure was one of my favorites out of the Circle C Adventures. Thank you again for sharing this with us, Mrs. M! :)

    -Sadie S.

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    1. Well, there will be lots of one on one in this version, since Cory and Jenny aren't around. LOL

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    2. Haha, yes, I guess that is inevitable. :)
      Do any of Andi's other friend's(like Cory) even appear again in this story? Or is that information top-secret until the ending, when I find out? ;)

      -Sadie S.

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    3. They'll reenter at the end of the story, during the Epilogue.

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    4. Ok, thank you!

      -Sadie

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  8. I love this story! So much like TWT! One thing: When Andi says she doesn't want to grow up, it says "Mitch scratched the back of his head, then took another sip of......" I believe you meant coffee. I couldn't help noticing that! I really am loving the Trouble at the Lineshack.

    ~Leah

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    1. Hey Leah, I also saw that and I was a little confused at first, but I think your right:)
      -Patience

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  9. I absolutely love it its going to be a great one!!!!

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